I have been learning how to elaborate and add detail to my piece of my writing and I need to use high level words in my writings. I need to use adjectives and similes because it helps me in my writing.

Race Day

The next day it was the day to go out and shine. I hopped on the plane. We were on our way to Brazil. I arrived at  12am I had a comfy sleep on the plane. When we arrived at the olympics we meet Sonny Bill Williams and Valerie Adams they were kick back. It was my turn. They were cheering me on it was like I was a superstar. I swam 200m for New Zealand it was fantastic because I came second and I won a silver medal I felt lucky. I said in my head yaaaay! Because I won. I took a flight home and showed my mum she said “I’m so proud of you”. Do you want to do it in Tokyo  because it’s coming up in 2020 I think this time you’ll come first.